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live in a big city
Living in a big city beings you some advantages as well as disadvantages. Because of too many traffic vehicles, factories, offices and overload population, air pollution is one the most significant disadvantages to live a big city. another disadvantages is the noises. People living in a big city seem to be stressful and have headaches because it is too noisy there. However, we also realize that them are many advantages when we live in a big city. big cisies are the place of employmant. Therefore, it is easy for you to find a suitable job with a better salary when you live in a big city. Besides, bic cities are the exciting place where there are nightclibs, bars, restaurants, mall centers and so on. In conclusin, live in a big city bring you advantages and disadvantages as well
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lemon
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Phổ thônghere are some my suggestions.
1. Living in a big city beings you some advantages as well as disadvantages.
Living in a big city brings you some advantages as well as disadvantages.
2. Because of too many traffic vehicles ...
I think you should not put "Because of" at the first position of the sentence. What do u think about this way:
" There are too many [... ] overload population, that's why air pollution [...] big city.
3. However, we also realize that them are many advantages...
However, we also realize that there are many advantages...
I see that your writing is not written carefully and there are some mistakes such as "cisies" line 4, "bic" line 6, "nightclibs"line 6, "conclusin' line 7 ...
4. The last sentence is not completed. I think you should give your own idea about living in a city (like or do not like)