Lương Nguyễn Kiến Tường
My pet! A dragon fish.
I had a pet, a Dragon fish. When I was a child, I liked many kinds of fish. I usually went to fish store to look them swam or their owner fed them. One day, I went to the fish store and I had saw a fish which was attracted me at the fist seeing. I really liked it, I thought that. It was a baby fish, his body was white and about five centimeter-long but it was slim of width. I quickly decided to be his owner that I saved my money until I could afford. When I had enough money, I again went to the fish store, paid money and carried him to my home. He was named Dragon Baby that was a strong name and it had a little lovely. Everyday, after school, I usually played with him. I could spend hours to watch his life or feed him. Day by day, we lived together, played each other, shared our stories. I shared all things maked me happy or upset and I also shared my passions. You shouldn't think he was a fish and he couldn't share his stories with me. We had many ways to communicate each other. For example, Dragon Baby usually swam around a rock that meaned he was hungry or when Dragon Baby was less dynamic than other days and he didn't play any things with me, I known that he wanted to ask : “ I need a friend, I am a fish and I can't play with a human all my life. Why don't you give me a friend? Could you please give me a friend?” After that, I went to fish store again and bought another dragon fish. I named her, Sam. When I put Sam into his house, Dragon Baby became lively and they quickly became a couple. When my fishes were bigger, my father wanted me to sell them. You know? Dragon fish is very famous and when we sell him we can have many money. I didn't want to sell him but I didn't want to make my father angry. So, I sold my fishes. You can not imaging what will happen. My fishes were not only so clever but also very loyal. Their new onwer said that when he bought them, they looked too upset. Dragon baby and Sam didn't eat any things, they didn't do something that they usually did with me. The new owner decided to repay my fishes and receive his money. Then, my father didn't want to sell them again. He usually told his friends about that story and he very pround of my fishes as they were his fishes. One year later, Dragon baby and Sam had many children and they had a real family. I thought they are my best friends who I could share anything with.
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Phổ thônglet me give some opinions (just suggest)
line1 usually went-> used to go (habit in the past)
line3 fist seeing-> first sight, was attracted->attracted
line 5 again went->came back
line 13 any things->anything
line 18: many money -> much money. him->them
line 19: imaging -> image
line 21:they didn't do something that they usually did with me ->they didn't act like when they were with me
line 23: he very pround-> he was very proud (proud is adj)