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. My dream
Today, it is not easy to choose a career. Every year, thousands of students take the entrance examination and compete with one another to pass the university which they want. Everybody has a dream and either do I. In the future, I want to become a famous lawyer.
Law is devided into civil law, economic law and international trade law. I am very interested in international trade law. I think it is an interesting sector of law for several reasons. Vietnam is a developing country. In the industrializing and modernizing way, the Vietnamese businesses have to integrate into world's economy. It is a fact that many enterprises get a lot of difficulty with law. Some enterprises doesn't understand about international law,so their business is unprofitable. So, I want to be a good lawyer to help them avoid of rick and earn money as much as possible. Then, the Vietnamese products will be know more and more in all over the world. Moreover, if I want to be good at international trade law, I must have good command of English background. So, when I graduate the university, I will have a wide knowledge about international trade law and an excellent English skill. As a lawyer, I have to speak well to protect my client. In this way, I can improve my powers of expression. In the future, economy will develope rapidly and many enterprises need a good lawyer to help them with administrative procedures, international law. So, I believe I will have plenty of opportunities to find a good job with a high salary if I am a famous lawyer.
To make my dream become true, I need study at law university. And, I choose Ha Noi law university. It is founded in November 10, 1979 .Its address is 87 Nguyen Chi Thanh, Lang Ha, Dong Da, Ha Noi. It is a famous law university in Vietnam. The quality of teaching is high with many good teacher. If I want to entrance the faculty of international trade law, I have to pass groud D which consists of math, literature and English. In 2014, the benchmark of faculty is 20, and it is the same in 2013. In 2015, the entrance examination has some changes. The GCSE result also is the entrance examination result. It is a difficult exam to me and the others.
I think, if I want to pass the examination, I have to learn by hard. "Rome is not build in a day". The difficult it is, the more efford I make. I believe that with my perseverance and strong enthusiasm, I can be successful
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Phổ thôngBài rối quá. Và chạy vòng quanh gà-trứng-gà...
- Nên chia ra 3 paragraph i) Khó của xin job và thi ĐH, nhưng... ii)Inter. Law với VN và iii) Plan (Eng.)...
- Trong mỗi p, chia 3-4-5 ý nhỏ. Có thể dùng Fistly... (and so on).
- industrializing and modernizing way --> ~process
- into world's economy. --> into the world's economy.
- Law is devided into --> Law, actually now, is devided into (mai nó thêm ngành thì sao)
- to pass the university which they want. --> to enter the university.
- a lot of difficulty --> difficulties
- enterprises doesn't --> don't
- understand about international law
- so their business is unprofitable --> is less profitable / may gain lower profits.
- avoid of rick and earn money as much as possible --> avoid risks and maximize the profit
- will be know --> known
- wide knowledge about --> a broad knowledge of
- to protect my client. --> clients
- economy will develope rapidly --> what eco.?
- to help them with administrative procedures, international law. --> to help them administer procedures, international law issues.
- I will have plenty of opportunities to find a good job with a high salary if I am a famous lawyer. --> Opportunities will be availble for me if I would be good at...
- make my dream become true --> come(s) true.
- Its address is 87 --> It locates at No. 87... / It addresses at No. 87...
- have to pass groud D --> have to join group D to pass 3 tests such as...
- In 2014, the benchmark of faculty is 20, and it is the same in 2013. --> It ranks 20th in 2014 and the same position came in 2013.
- It is a difficult exam to me and the others. --> It would be a quite difficult exam.
- I have to learn by hard. --> learn hard
- The difficult it is, the more efford I make. --> - The more difficult it is, the bigger effort I have to do.
- with my perseverance and strong enthusiasm... --> with my perseverance and my strong enthusiasm...
- I can be successful. --> I will do success.