Bui Quynh Trang
Please read and correct my mistakes in this paragraph, I am very grateful to you:
At this time, I often overwork and suffer from stress. Especially today, it was an exhausting and remarkable day for me.
I went to work earlier. I started right away my work, even I did not have time to check and reply my emails. At noon, we took a break for some minutes. When my colleague was talking non-stop about her new car, my boss came. He asked us to stop talking nonsens and go back to work. After a hard working day, I left my office at eight o'clock. Unfortunately, my motobike broke down. I would like to ask someone to give me a ride but all my colleagues had already came back home. I decided to take a bus. My office is so far from the bus stop, so I had to run to catch the bus. But my effort led to nothing. I missed my bus. I was really sick of waiting for the next one for so long. Finally, the bus came. People crowded to the entrance of the bus. The bus driver asked people to wait for those getting off to descend first but they forgot all rules of fair play and politeness and keep pushing to enter the bus. When I got on the bus, I did not have any change handy with me to pay fare. A kind passenger offered me a ticket. No seat was free, even reserved seats. The bus was really full of people. I had a place for only one foot. I almost felt over when the bus moved off and every time it came to a stop. After one hour, thank my God, I could get off the bus.
I think I will ride my bike to work tomorrow. It is not only good for environment but also helps me be in shape and stay healthy.
Chicken Baby
Klaus
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1) I started right away my work, even I did ...
-> Nên viết là: I started working right away. Và bạn dùng chữ even để nối 2 sentences là ko chính xác, bạn có thể dùng even though hoặc although .
2) break for some minutes
-> Ko dùng some cho thời gian được, bạn có thể viết : a few minutes break
3)...about her new car, my boss came... /
-> my boss came in
4) to stop talking nonsense
-> Câu này nghe hơi lạ, nên dùng: to stop gossiping.
5) ask someone to give me a ride / came back home
-> Ask someone for a ride / had already left
6) My office is so far
-> Nên dùng too để chỉ việc gì đó negative: my office is too far from the bus stop
7) .But my effort led to nothing.
Thường thì ko nên bắt đầu một câu bằng các coordinating conjuctions (FANBOY), bạn nên viếtt: However, all my efforts were wasted ( or in vain) , and I missed the bus.
8) I had a place for ...
-> I had room for only one foot.
9) I almost felt over .... , thank my God
-> fall / fell / fallen
-> Almost fell over whenever the bus started moving or came to a stop. After one hour, thanks God, I was able to get off the bus.
10) ...be in shape
-> helps me stay in shape and be healthy.
11) Finally, the bus arrived.