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essay writing for ielts
topic: Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems.
To what extent do you agree and disagree?
What other measure do you think might be effective.
Nowadays, rising vehicle and pollution problems which has recieved a lot of people's attention because they have caused many negative results. Many people say that increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve those problems. However, in my opinion, that way is not effectively while some solutions for this situation are more far outweigh, therefore, I disagree totally.
First of all, rising the price of the petrol leads to some worse problems will appear. If this way happen, many goods will increase the following. A small example may give some light to this point. The price of vegettable in the market rise and students who are low income, they have to pay more money, making their life become more difficult. In addition, people are more hard-working because they have to take care of their chirdren such as study, tution fee... Every thing is increasing more and more whereas salary of teachers, staffs, ... does not rise or increase slightly. People must suffer about finance.
Seconderly, in fact, there are some other good way for this two problems. Instead of increasing the price of the petrol to solve about too much vehicle now, we can improve parks by making more and extend them because most of parks still are small and not much. This way help to go down traffic jam problem due to have so much traffic. Besides, improving the pollution, people should clean the streets, plant trees, especially encourage people using their bicycle or something like that. Some people think that increasing the price of petrol can decrease the number of traffic on the streets. This may be true; however, traffic is a thing to trasport necessary for people. Traffic makes people's life becoming more fluent, for example, a victim is fell sick very serious, a mortobike or car at that time is very useful and necessary.
All in all, rising the price of petrol is not a effective way to improve traffic and pollution problems, i think that the goverment needs to make a good solution for this issue.
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Anh Nguyen
Blue Memberin my opinion, your writting is quite good but supported ideas is still poor and inexact. i am totally agree with the second idea but the first dont convince me because it seems to be far from the question: ' Is increasing the price of petrol the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems ?'. May be it raises expenses of Vegetable.... but it can solve perfectly growing vihicles and pollution issues. In the second idea, you persuade that 'people should clean the streets, plant trees' is not relative with this but i am agree with "encourage people using their bicycle" because it is quite near to petrol limit. Also having some mistakes in using words. I think 'victim' is incorrect and so on.
Above one is just my opinion. Please share IELTS topics and discuss together. I am interested in this topic.