Kiều Nguyễn
Haunted hair
I study in Choo school. In my class there is a girl name is Peggy. She has a yellow straight hair. She likes to make up when she goes to school. One day, she swings to class with a long black hair. I run to her, and I stroke her hair. I ask:
- It's look like a real hair. It's very smooth!
Peggy's smile and said:
- Of course, it's from human's head.
I shout and jump out. She's laugh:
- Scare, right? People sale this on the road.
Then she runs to Jenny, her best friend.
When Mindy brings the camera to our class, we stand in front of the board for a photo. Mindy develops a film, everybody are very excited to see. Jenny sees first. When she dones, her face is very white but she doesn't say anything. Then everybody see it but no one talk together.
Peggy and I see it last. Then I scream:
- Oh my God!
In the photo, Peggy doeesn't have hair. Behind her is Kate, the girl had dead last month...
The photo in the bin after Peggy sees it.
Peggy goes home. She takes out the long black hair and throw it into the bin. She goes to sleep early.
When it's midnight, her laptop opens. The nem e-mail from "thefriendinthedark":
- Everybody can make up, but you can't...
Peggy gets up and goes to the bathroom. She looks at the mirror.
- What it is going on here?
The long black hair is on her head!
The bell is ring but I don't see Peggy. I hear some noises in the toilet. I run into it.
Peggy is in here. She cuts her hair with a crazy hand.
- Hey, Peggy, why your hair so long?- I ask.
- I don't know. You watch...
She cuts a little of hair. In 2 seconds, the hair grows up again.
- AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA!
I scream and run into class.
In the next day, the newspaper reports:
- The polices are finding about the girl's trace. She has long black hair, wears an uniform from Choo school and a sign in the left. Her name is Peggy. She is dead under the tree in the park with a pain on the neck.
Yesterday there was a man saw everything. He said:
- I went pass this park and I saw a girl in an uniform from Choo school, too. I saw her sign. Her name is Kate and she killed Peggy with a knife.
I almost dizzy when I hear this report. Oh my God, it's so terrible!
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julienguyen
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In my class, there is a girl named Peggy.
I asked her ." It looks like.."
Bạn đã dùng từ said trong câu kế tiếp, mà giữa and là hai động từ cùng thì nhé bạn.
Peggy smiled and said
She laughed. -- Lỗi của bạn đã số là thêm 's không cần thiết.
Đoạn dưới cũng tương tự như vậy.