Elena Evans ( Thiên Ngọc )
my friend
our friendship
Chapter one
My Friends
My name's Elena Jusander . In my school - Marie Cuire pimary school , I have two close friends . They are Emily Janneti and Maria Brichot . Maria is good at math , she won the top prize in their competition lever Math City . Emily is good at Literature , she won the top prize in their competition lever Literature City . And I won pediatric in competition lever English City . Emily is very clever . She made a cake for me in my birthday patty . Maria doesn't clever but she is very careful and care to everybody . When I sick, she always visits I after school . I really have soem the best friends .
Phạm Tiến Định
Phổ thôngGreat job, Lady. But I think ur topic remains sth uncorrect.
1. Dictate/Grammar errors: pimary/PRIMARY school, patty/PARTY, soem/SOME, I/ME.
In competition/ In THE competition.
2. Words wrong: Their comptetion: Because u aim to talk about either Emily or Maria, so don't use their, use an article here, THE. Doesn't clever: Firstly, Maria won the top prize on city Math competition, and u said she is good at math, so is it true about her??? Secondly, clever is an adj, so don't use do/does.
Hope it helps u sth