Write a short paragraph about the advantages of smartphones.

Nguyễn Chí Thanh - 13/07/2013 23:38

Write a short paragraph about the advantages of smartphones.

The advantages of smartphones.

Hello everybody, i am trying to practical writing skills. This is my writing. Could you help me to correct it. Tks so much ^^.

Nowadays, smartphones have many advantages. You can do anything with smartphones, for examples, pay bills of electricity or buy something on the internet from the phone's browser. You can study everywhere with smartphones if you upload your data to the internet. In addition, smartphone also have dictionary applications which you can use to looking for others words when you are learning foreign languages. Furthermore, you don't need worry if you lost the way when you are travelling, because smartphones are allowed you find out the way with maps applications. Overall, smartphones is really useful for people with many advantages.

Apple - 13/07/2013 23:39

u did a great job :))

pham trong nghia - 14/07/2013 11:11

mình xin góp ý nhé,nếu mình có sai thì mong bạn chỉ ngược lại nhé

trong câu "i am trying to practical writing skills" .theo mình thì dùng practice mới đúng chứ,còn skill không thêm s vì chỉ có 1 kĩ năng.

trong câu ''You can do anything with smartphones....." thì mình dùng something.vì dạng any thì hay dùng trong câu phủ định hoặc nghi vấn

Apple - 14/07/2013 12:45

anything 1 số trường hợp dung như nhấn mạnh thôi mà ... dùng sth nghe k hay bằng anything :P

Nguyễn Chí Thanh - 14/07/2013 19:56

Nowadays, there are many advantages in having a smartphones. You can do many things with a smartphone, for example, paying electrical bills or buying something on the Internet from using the phone's browser. You can study everywhere with a smartphone if you uploaded your data to the Internet. Moreover, smartphones also have dictionary applications which you can use to look for words when you are learning for foreign languages. Furthermore, you do not need to worry if you are lost when you are travelling because smartphones are allow you to find the way with a map application. Overall, smartphones are really useful for people.

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I have corrected this paragraph. You can read again. Have a good night everyone. :D

Nguyễn Trường An - 17/07/2013 11:11

hay

chiến phong aragon - 06/11/2013 19:23

i am trying to practical writing skills= mình nghĩ là practise

pay bills of electricity or buy something on the internet from the phone's browser: thiếu object.... cần có chủ ngữ ko thì biến thành paying hay buying

=pay bills mình nghĩ là dùng make payment nghe hay hơn !

You can study everywhere with smartphones( study something nghĩa là learn something) viết là study everywhere gây khó hiêu mình nghĩ là by staying at home we also can study overseas through a smartphone which was connected the internet.

which you can use to look for words: tra từ điểm thì dùng look up

if you are lost= là bị mất cái gì dùng get lost là đi lạc ^^

smartphones are allow: chỗ này sai are vs allow là 2 động từ: bỏ tử are đi dùng allow thôi

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